The Black Follower (2011 or the beginning of 2012)- full story

"Nobody can escape the Black Follower... Nobody!"

The story is not suitable for younger than 15 years, disturbing scenes (it's a horror story), mild profanity
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Chapter I

 The enormous orange moon shone in the middle of the sky- midnight came and the creepy silence filled the deserted streets. At the top of the building, looking at the most creepy moon that ever shone in the sky, a girl in a black dress was standing,with dark red hair and the eyes from which emerged red light. She jumped from the building to the building, as easily as a feather, searching for someone on the streets of a sleeping city.

 "Great ruler, who will be perfect for my plan? Show me the way to them, take me through that path!" she said and teleports near a nightclub.

 There she found a girl of blue curly hair, dressed in a mini skirt, a pink top and with knee-lenght boots on her legs,who had a quarrel with a young man. Guy: "Come on... Nothing will happen if you come with me." Girl: "Just because I dressed a little more open doesn't mean I'm going with you, I'm not for sale,you monkey! What, you never saw a pretty girl in tight clothes?!" A black girl thought, "One of the four found."

 While the girl, whose name was Mery, had an argue with a rude young man, the Black Girl continued her journey. She found herself in front of a family house, slowly approaching the window and seeing a woman in the late twenties that was lulling her two daughters who had a nightmares.Her name was Margareth, she had a brown hair and a feminine figure, she usually wore a red shirt, dark pants, on her neck was the necklace she got from her husband. Black girl: "And that would be two."

 The next person on whose window she appeared was Daniela. She is a businesswoman, usually wearing a business suit, her hair is black,shoulder-lenght and with cascaded layers. Black girl: "Another one and then I can start ..."

 In the park, the Black Girl saw the last person for her plan. She is Lauren, has a light-brown hair with two tails at the top of her head, wears a pink blouse with wide sleeves, a light-blue top over it and wide pants of pastel color.

 The black girl looked at the moon once more, then disappeared into the fog.

 The next day began. Margareth wakes her daughter for school, Daniela goes to work, Mery sleeps and Lauren goes for a walk.

 Daniela went into the office when no one was there, then her boss came and said, "You have already arrived? You are the really diligent! You have no need to come so early, rest a bit - you could sleep for another half an hour!" Daniela: "I can't sleep for longer, and I like it when I come here early, I can enjoy silence for some time." Boss: "You are like daughter to me, so I want to advise you not to think only of work. Time passes, there will be time for work, and you are now in the best years of establishing a family ..." Daniela: "I don't even plan a family. I don't need a husband, and with him children, I'm good this way." Boss: "Eh, what are you going to do one day when you grow old like me, you'll be very lonely, old age is difficult when you spend it alone. " Daniela: "I'm used to being a lonely person. This job keeps me in my life. If I didn't have it I wouldn't have had anything to live for." The boss (interrupted): "Do not say such morbid things-what a talking about death at that age! You have a lot of years ahead of you. You must at least think about what I've been telling you. " Daniela nodded, and the boss went to his office.

 At the other end of the city, Margareth talked with the teacher. Margareth: "You sent me a letter to come. Is everything all right with my girls?" Teacher: "Everything is fine as far as their grades is concerned, better than last year, but they are still a bit absent on classes. Do you agree them to discuss with expert about their feelings? " Margareth: "I'm not sure ...they will be better soon, I hope so..." Teacher: "It's been a year since, but still ..." Margareth (holding tears): "It will not be necessary, we already know the cause of their absence, but a conversation with a psychologist will not bring back their father."

 Mery woke up about ten o'clock and immediately went under the shower. The doorbell was heard, and then scrapeing of the bathroom's door... someone was moving towards the shower. Mery (scared): "Who is it?(screaming)" "Calm down, Mery, that's me, Dina, housemaid." Mery (coming out and put a towel): "I'm sorry, I watched the horror movie yesterday, so I'm terrified now." Dina: "That's how you reacted the last time too. Give up these movies a bit." Mery: "Oh, Dina, you're acting like my mother, it's just temporary. Horror movies are very instructive. Since I started watching them, I'm much more careful." Dina: "And you scream every time you wake up before my arrival. " Mery: "Maybe you're right.These terrible creatures are not real anyway."

 Lauren sat in a nearby cafe with a boyfriend, enjoying a pleasant afternoon. He: "I was thinking about something... we have been dating for a year and a half and every moment with you is like a fairytale... Maybe we should be closer. "Lauren (happy):" Do you think we're getting married ?! " He: "Yes. It's the next step I was going to do-to ask you to marry me. I want it to be romantic." Lauren (embraced him): "You already know the answer, but feel free to do it. (stood up) I need to get on bus, now it will come... Oh, I am so happy! Well,we'll see tonight. " He: "All right, beauty, everything will be ready."

 Five o'clock in the afternoon. Margareth and Daniela stand at the bus stop. Daniela (for herself): "Oh, come on, this bus is always late for a few minutes ..." Margareth: "Are you impatient or in hurry?" Daniela: "A lot of things are waiting to be done ... I have to clean the apartment, I have not been able to clean this week." Margareth: "It's hard when somebody has to finish it all themself. I have to go to school for my daughters in the afternoon. Here is the bus! " Daniela: "Great!"

 Lauren reached the bus, entered and sat next to Margareth, and Daniela sat alone. Mery ran for the bus that just went, all the time shouting: "Hellooooo, stupid bus, stop! Stop,dammit!" The bus stops and Mery gets in. The driver (looks at her): "You are late... BLOODY MERY!" Mery (distracted): "WHAT? How do you know my name ?!" Driver: "My mistake. I wanted to say Blondy Mary, I apologize." Mary (shocked): "What the hell ...?" (she leaves and finds a place next to Daniela) "

The bus was heading towards the last destination...

Chapter II

 Lauren (looking out the window): I can not believe it's finally happening! It's too good to be true! (turns to Margaret) Miss, is this a reality? Margaret (smiled slightly): "It is. Something made You very happy?" Lauren: "Yes, I will get engaged this evening!" Margareth (smile): "That's wonderful. The marriage is a wonderful part of the relationship." Lauren: "Are you engaged?" Margaret (sadly): "I was married." Lauren (more seriously): "Oh, you've been divorced. Sorry." Margareth: "We did not divorce - he died a little over a year ago while driving a company's car that was not exactned. We have two daughters,nine and seven year old." Lauren (sad): "Oh, that's very terrible! I'm so sorry about that! " Margareth: "Thank you. It's okay."

 Mery: "This bus goes like somebody punctuted all it's wheels and took out almost all parts!Come on, I want to get out of this creepy bus with a driver who knows my name, although I see him for the first time in my life!" Daniela (putting hand on the head): "What is this unbearable high-frequency sound?" Mery (suddenly closed her eyes and covered her face with her hand): "I don't know, but I hear it now too!" Margaret and Lauren did the same, while other travelers did not hear anything.

 The black girl looked at the bus with her hellish eyes, laughed maliciously and said: "It's time for a...BOOM!"

 After her words, the bus exploded into a pieces, and with it parts of the body of passengers scattered along the street. It was quite clear that there were no survivors in that pool of blood.

 The police demanded an autopsy and found out who died, but the names of the four women were not on the list. "Sir, my girlfriend was on that bus!"- Lauren's boyfriend yelled, and the policeman replied, "I already told you that there is not her body! Please, I beg you to leave me alone-all day I'm watching corpses and blood, and now I have to listen to you too. Please turn to someone else." He got upset, furiously hit the wall and shouted: "She means to me a lot, she is the center of my world! Can't I see her again, even if she is dead?" The policeman only listens to him and then turns around and walks away.

 In the dark and cool room, breathing was heard and, a little later, voices as well. "What is this place, what the hell?" -someone asked, then someone else asked, "Where are we?" The room lighted and Margareth, Mery, Daniela and Lauren recognized each other. They are alive! But,all this confused them. What happened and how did they get here?

 They all went towards the tunnel from which the red light came out and then the black smoke. The tunnel led to a room that looked like a tomb, along which the rats walked freely. Lauren (screaming): "Disgusting!(goes to cleanliness) This place is creepy!"

 Daniela touched a statue that represented an unknown girl to them. It was the Black Follower, a girl from the very beginning of the story. Daniela: "This statue is so beautifully done- they were looking at every detail, I am amazed. Like the real person is in the stone." Mery: "Like some dark version of Jessica Rabbit. Too prominent curviline if you ask me." Margareth: "I think it's beautiful, but this place sends chills to my spine." Lauren (touches the statue): "On her necklace is written ,,EVIL"... (the statue began to turn into a living being, making the girls scream and move aside) She's alive! " Mery: "I knew I shouldn't have left home today!"

Chapter III

 Black Follower: "Welcome to my modest home." Mery: "You could clean it a bit, you have rats everywhere around the crib." Black Follower: "Yes, they are my pets. They give a nice atmosphere to my home." Lauren: "Okaaaay..."

Black Follower: "The bus in which you were exploded and everyone in it died. Except you , as you can notice. "Margareth (shocked):" This is a terrible tragedy! Does this mean that you have saved us from death? " Black Follower (laughs maliciously): "You must be kidding me! I'm not saving- I'm ruining. What do you think, who's responsible for the explosion? (laughter) There's nothing better than taste of a massacre. You'll soon feel it. "

 Daniela : "That is disgusting! What do you want from us at all?!!!" Black Follower: "You will become my slaves. Margareth will become The Killer Margareth, Daniela will become Dark Daniela, Lauren will be Dangerous Lauren and Mery ... Bloody Mery." Mery: "Haha,what a clishe, Bloody Mery. You think we'll agree to play super villains with you?" Black Follower: "Of course you can refuse, but then you can say goodbye of all that are meaningful to you. I will find them one by one and then I will kill them all." Margareth: "You can't ..." Black Follower: "I can and I will, so you better not tempt me. You have one day to live your old life and then you will be here again. If you try to escape, it will be my pleasure to liquidate one by one person from your life. The choice is on you."

 Morning. Mery woke up early, surprising Dina. "Did you have a problem with sleeping? You were up early." Mery (after a few moments of silence): "This must be the most beautiful day of my life. I'm going to the boutique to buy the most beautiful and expensive dress, and then I will buy the most expensive shoes, then go to the hairdresser and eventually go to the best club with Jessica, Jul and Deina. I'll only buy the most expensive drinks until all of this is over. "Dina (frightened)" What will be over? Are you okay, Mery? Tell me if something is wrong." Mery:" It's all right ... I'm moving out. Don't ask me anything, I just want to thank you for all these years since you are with me. This is the salary for this month and the extra money until you find a new job." Dina:" It's not about money, why are you leaving just like that? It doesn't look like you at all! There must be a reason ! " Mery: "It doesn't matter, Dina. Goodbye. (gets out and leaves Dina alone)"

 Daniela came to work earlier. The boss (entering the office): "Oh, thanks heavens, you are alive! I was very worried when I heard the news that the bus exploded, I thought you were in it!" Daniela: "Yes ... I had to come to the store and the bus went without me ..." Boss:" You see that you were unbelieveably lucky!" Daniela (throught): If this could be called lucky ..."

 Lauren's boy sat alone by the water and occasionally cried, thinking that Lauren was dead. She looked at him from afar, not knowing how to say goodbye to him in a painless way. She could not break up with him, it would be too painful for both of them. She approached slowly.

 Lauren: "It's me, turn around." Boyfriend (surprised): "You are alive?! You are alive!" (Embraced and wept) How did you survive? " Lauren: "I went out two stations before that ..." Boyfriend: "I didn't sleep whole night, I was afraid you were in that bus... I'm glad to see you!" Lauren: "I have to... go. I will not be here for a while, I do not know how long." Boyfriend: "We'll chat every day, I'll wait until you come back ..." Lauren (interrupted him):"This cousin I go to is cut off from the world and... we will not see for a while at all .." It was difficult to think of the perfect lie for a farewell.

 Margareth was the hardest to say goodbye to her daughters. She spent the whole day with them, fearing that she might never see them again. In the evening, she led a conversation with her mother-in-law about her departure. Margareth: "I have to go on a business trip ... it will take some time, so please keep the girls until I get back. "Mother:" Well then, I will... And where are you going? " Margareth: "I do not know ... I mean, there are several different cities in question, so I could not remember them." She hoped that this lie would cover the situation sufficiently until she get out of the Black Follower's hands.

 Only one day was not enough for everything they wanted to do. Mery did everything she said she would do: she bought a short and glittering dress as she knew that like Bloody Mery she would wear that disgusting white dress that looks more like a sack than a dress. The hairdresser made her a beautiful haircut, boots she bought were black, as well as the dress. She enjoyed with her friends in the afternoon and then at midnight she went home.

 Margareth quietly entered the room of her daughters, kissed them for the last time and went out, not wanting to think that she might never see them again.

 Lauren was thinking about escaping during the day, but she was scared for the lives of her loved ones and eventually gave up.

 Daniela decided to secretly write a letter so that others would know she was alive, or at least hoped to be. She could not tell anyone and put them at risk. She was discovered when a colleague asked her what she wrote, but she only answered that it was just a ordinary letter. She hid it below the computer.

 It was the end of their life on Earth... The last day of their life was peaceful...

 And then it was gone. They woke up in that dark room. Black Follower: "Welcome to your new life! (others look her with disdain) It's time for your transformation. After I say the spell, you will find yourself in four different rooms, and then you will die the same way you will later kill the others."

She pronounced the spell and they found themselves in four different rooms. Mery was bound to a chair, Lauren in a deep caldron which stood on the fire, Margareth was tied to the wedges on the wall and Daniela tied to the conveyor belt of an electric saw like those in the sawmills. What will happen?

Chapter IV

 "Where is that damn wraith, it's getting hot in here!" Lauren cried, trying to get out of the caldron in which the water had already become hot. She cried out of agony, knowing she would be boiled alive.

 The Black Follower entered room where Mery was. She grinned, then took the knife into her hands. Mery: "I hate knives, get that thing away from me, I will never kill someone with a knife!" Black Follower: "You know what is fun with the knives? You can play as much as you want! (cuts Mery's hand so she moaned) If you think that's fun, just watch this! (stabs knife into her stomach, making her scream with pain) You can cut something off, too (takes Mery's hand and, with one move of a knife, cut off her finger) Isn't this fun?! I can stab knife into your neck, but your tears are music for my ears. I'll enjoy a little more, I have to give other girls a fun too, it's not fair that only you have fun while they wait." Mary: "You're crazy! You're out of your mind!" Black Follower: "I know. You know what? You bored me a bit. It's over with your life!" (stabs her neck). In two hours you will be Bloody Mary, we'll see then. "

 Black Follower then came into room where Daniela was. Daniela: "You're going to cut me into pieces? That's probably the only thing you can do on this stupid saw!" Black Follower: "Good, great conclusion!" (turning a saw on) We'll, see later or, better to say, I'll see you later ..." Daniela:" Damn it, I'm getting closer to the blades ...AAAAAAAAAAA! "

 Margareth thought more about her daughter's goodness than if the Black Follower was going to kill her, but it wasn't all the same to her when she called her name. The blood in her veins was freezed. Black Follower: "It's time for you to die and the Killer Margareth to come to your place! I'm sure you do not have the last wish, but even if you have there is no enough time to tell me about it. Goodbye... To your limbs, for the beggining (turns into a Grim Reaper and cuts off Margareth's arm), and then I'll relieve your pain, (cutting off the other arm and both legs) by beheading you. (cuts her head out and leaves the room) Goodbye, Margareth." That was,no doubt ,the greatest suffering Margaret had ever felt, a brief but extremely painful experience.

 Instead of going to Lauren, the Black Follower went to the room with saw. There was no longer Daniela, but a half-cut body with a river of blood, innards and in some parts bones were seen. It would be a disgusting sight for everyone except for the Black Follower- she only smiled and headed for Lauren.

 Lauren's body was slowly decaying in the boiling water. Lauren was already dead, so the Black Follower moved caldron away, waiting for a transformation into Dangerous Lauren.

 Two hours later, in a main chamber entered: Bloody Mery in a white dress covered with blood, Dark Daniela in a sleeveless shirt and black trousers, with fingerless gloves, The Killer Margareth with a black dress to the floor that had hood behind, as well as Dangerous Lauren dressed in a bloody red top with laced 3/4 sleeves and the area around the stomach and a red tight-lenght skirt.

 Black Follower: "It's time to split up and choose your victims.Dark Daniela, you're going to kill men, The Killer Margareth is in charge of older people, Bloody Mery will become a nightmare of children and Dangerous Lauren will kill women. The first who gets total of twenty victims receive a reward."

 That evening they all brought their victims to their chambers and killed them all in the way they died. The dungeon echoed with a scream of victims as they suffered the agony that dark creatures created. Lauren pulled heart out of her victim, putting it on a shelf, which she continued to do with other victims and in the next few weeks she had a "Dead Heart Collection".

 A few days after the disappearance, the family and friends of girls were concerned. Margaret's mother-in-law and Lauren's boyfriend were unsuccessfully calling the phone number to get at least some news from them and Dina worried about Mery. Daniela's boss, who was her closest person and a friend of her deceased father, asked his colleague if some of them saw something strange the day they saw her for the last time. One of the employees answered: "I saw that she was writing something and I asked her what it was,she told me that this is ordinary letter... I don't really know what that might be. "The boss (putting hand on the head):" We had a weird conversation a week ago ... She mentioned this job means to her more than her life... If something bad happened at work I would be sure she did something to hurt herself! I do not know if she would do it like this... I only hope she is alive and well! This doesn't look like her at all. I am also hoping that this was not a farewell letter. "

 Dark Daniela's chamber: D.D caught a thirty-years-old man and tied him to the saw, preparing to turn on the button. Man: "Do I have the right for the last wish?" D.D: "No. There is no time for such triviality." Man: "Nothing big- if I already have to die, I want to ... you know ... for the last time be with a pretty girl, and you're incredibly hot in that clothes and ..." D.D: "You want that? (approaching)Pathetic. I'm your killer, do you understand? I'LL KILL YOU. No wonder I have no urge for you- most of you are just looking at appearance and, if we are not good enough to you, then you find us disgusting. If you saw me fifteen years ago you would probably laugh in my face, and now you would be ready to spend your damn last wish on something irrelevant. (going to the saw and turning it on) Women are not objects, dummy, we are beings like you. " Man (panic): "You are evil!" D.D: "Yes, I am, but that does not mean I'm wrong. I'm just building my hatred from what I found in the body of the person I inhabit. It looks like she was just disappointed in your kind. (A man slowly gets sliced under an electric saw, sharp teeth pass through his body as through a butter) Lovely, one less. I will enjoy his execution."

Chapter V

 The Killer Margareth's champer: T.K.M. binds her victim with chains for wedges on the wall. A man of about seventy years old, still vital and youthful for his age, panickedly looked around and said, "Why did I come here? Who are you? " T.K.M.:" I feel the anger of a woman in whose body I am... She had a problem with her parents-they hated her husband and cursed him until he died under strange circumstances ... She hated them and so now I hate you. Lovely circle of hatred, but you are the weakest link in this chain and therefore you fall out. Greet your friends. (takes scythe in her hands and, after cutting off his limbs, executes a man and goes away)"

 Dangerous Lauren's chamber: D.L watches the victim in a deep caldron, enjoying her cries. D.L.: "How pleasant sound of helplessness. Can you be a little louder? You scream too quietly." Woman:" Let me, please, let me out of here! " D.L: "No, I will not let you go, I need a heart for my collection. I didn't have time to show you my collection, I'm so sorry about it. You see how we are having a good time, we have enough time to talk until this water, which is becoming increasingly hot, doesn't kill you." Woman:" I feel my feet are burning! Leave me out of here, in the name of the world!Have a mercy! " D.L: "But,don't you enjoy talking to me, am I so bad at conversation? You're like a sister of this girl inside, you just want to go. I wanted us to chat as sisters, but you will not do it. (puts wood on the fire) You disappointed me! I don't want to look at you anymore! (coming out of the room)"

 After three hours, she pulled out the victim's heart and took care of body.

 Bloody Mery's chamber: As you can imagine, Bloody Mery's chambers were a horror for every parent. Maybe some of you would want to skip the part that follows.

B.M: "Hello, little boy." Boy: "Where am I? I want to go home, my mom will be angry if I do not get in time." B.M.:"Oh, don't worry for your mom, she will never be angry on you again. Seems you haven't listened to her when she told you not to be outside when the night falls, have you? " Boy: "You are scaring me!" B.M: "And you should be scared! The girl before me was also scared, but she never had mom and dad with her to comfort her and tell her everything was fine, she was mostly left to other people. Even before her death, a long-time housekeeper was a substitute for her mother, because real mother didn't care. I will bring your greetings to your mom. (pulls out a knife from sleeve and ends her job quickly and without too much disturbance) "

 All twenty victims passed through the hell of gloomy creatures, which were more cruel with every next victim and showing ever greater coldness. It's been a month since the transformation, all the girls collected twenty victims, so they came to the Black Follower to seek their reward. D.D.:"You have promised reward, now fulfill the promise!" D.L.: "You would be better to do that because I'll enjoy adding your heart to my collection!" T.K.M: "And make sure prize is as good as our efficiency." B.M: "Well, what's the prize?" Black Follower: "I wanted to give some privileges to the winner, but you are all equal for now and I think that the roles should be increased. I'll tell you who to bring here - the first one who kills her victim will win freedom, she can become like me and make her own army, or do it on her own, while the other three will remain under my command and listen to my orders. " T.K.M.: It sounds great. "Black Follower (writes something on paper and gives them):" Bring these people tonight, I'm waiting for you."

 Daniela's colleague accidentally found a letter hidden under the computer and immediately informed the boss. Inside was:

 "Whatever happens, I want you to know that some dark creature called Black Follower forced me to do it. I would never hurt myself nor others and therefore I'm afraid of what it will require of me. If nothing else, know that I didn't abandon you intentionally, nor would I ever do it. See you again, I hope so.

Daniela

 Boss: "This means that someone has kidnapped her, I have to inform the police! (he takes the phone in his hands, but wraith in black takes him, so he does not come to it)."

 The night fell and the creatures gathered around the circle where the Black Follower stood, watching the girls around happily. The girls thought that they would finally get their freedom, but then they looked at the victims of other girls-they were their beloved ones! The Killer Margareth held Daniela's boss, Dangerous Lauren Dina, Dark Daniela Lauren's boyfriend and Bloody Mery Margareth's children! Although their brain was washed, they could not let their loved ones be killed ...

Chapter VI

 Black Follower: "You can start with a massacre!" Lauren's boyfriend: "Darling, what happened to you, you do not look like yourself!" Margareth's daughters: "Mom, save us!" Boss: "Daniela, we thought you were dead ... but I do not understand what's going on here!" Dina: "Mery, why did not you tell me about this?"

 T.K.M. (to Bloody Mery): "Don't you dare to hurt my children!" B.M.: "I do not guarantee it if Dangerous Lauren hurts Dina! "D.D. (The Killer Margaret): " Then you let my boss go! " D.L. (Dark Daniela): "Will you let my beloved go then? Do you guarantee that you will?" D.D.:,No." B.M: "Me neither." T.K.M: "Then we play it!"

 Everyone's hand were shaking. If they kill someone who means a lot to someone else, maybe the other girl will kill the one who means to them! It's too difficult decision.

 T.K.Margareth threw a weapon on the floor and addressed Bloody Mery: "Freedom doesn't mean anything to me if my daughters die, do not kill them- they are my everything on this world." At that time she turned back to Margareth and went to hug her daughters. Bloody Mery took the opportunity and grabbed Daniela's boss, leaving Margareth with the girls on the other side.

 The Black Follower was trembling with rage, but she expected that other girls would not give up and make a bloody show for her. Boss: "You must get beat it!" (Bloody Mery moves the blade to his neck)" Lauren's boyfriend:" Lauren, get back before it's too late! "Dina:" Mery, you're not a killer, you're a girl who likes to have fun! "

 Another weapon fell to the ground- Daniela was back again, and then Mery and Lauren ran to their beloved, embracing them without paying attention to now already completely full of the rage Black Follower. She only looked at the girls with her hellish red eyes and then disappeared into the smoke.

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 Before they realized what had just happened, they suddenly found themselves in the same bus they were in a couple of weeks ago.

 Mery (shocked): "Impossible! I no longer know what the truth is and what's an illusion!" Margareth: "We are alive! It means that everything was just a dream or ..." Daniela: "Maybe the Black Follower doesn't even exist? " Lauren (looking at the phone):" Did you have a message from a number that ends with three sixths? Creepy, but I'll open it. " Everyone else: "Yes, and we have that message!"

 The message was: "It turns out that you are not the material for my army - I thought you were tougher, but you were ordinary weening persons who are tied to trivial things like a family. Here, I brought you back to the time when these insignificant people in this insignificant bus are still alive, and you have not killed anyone. In return, if you tell anyone else about my existence and reveal my secret, say goodbye to those for whom you have been cried for few moments ago. As a reminder of the time spent under my command, on your shoulder are remained the initials of what you were- they are there to find you anytime. Do not even try to go against me because NO CAN CAN RUN AWAY FROM THE BLACK FOLLOWER. No one! "

 Lauren: "Uh, I'm telling you, it's creepy." Mery: "Yes, how could all this fit in just one message ?!" Margareth: "Look over there, on top of that building, that's her! "

 The Black Follower watched them from afar. The girl in a black dress, with dark red hair and the eyes from which the red light came out, was closely following the bus that was moving. Nobody else could see her. She smiled maliciously and then disappeared wrapped in black smoke ...

The end

Suzana Ristic Suza
31.3.2017 10:26
original written at the end of 2011, possibly at the beginning of 2012
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Disscusion:

 I did not believe that this story will also get its rewriting because I , quotting myself, described it as the "most boring story" and called myself "the writer of this catastrophe."

 However, I saw that it had potential and that I might have been too rough. It was supposed to be a horror story, so I tried to make it happen. What was missing for the first time is more of those "sick" details, which I have now added and made the story more creepy. For me the word "creepy" signifies something interesting , you just get used to it with metal music.:D

 The story actually tells us that to (average) people are more important those who are always with them, that is, the ones they consider as family, but themselves. There are four forms of family figure and also four instincts: the need for gentleness and care (mother figure), the need for authority and protection (paternal figure), the need for love and connection (ie. the figure of a soulmate), and there is a need to protect the weaker (figure of children). These figures were also in the original (except paternal figure), and now I became more concerned with psychology.

 I added a psychological side and in the selection of their victims: Daniela had a problem with bullying during puberty which caused her to start to despise younger men, Lauren was neglected by a sister she considered as her model, Mery did not have enough attention from her parents, and Margareth was angry on her parents because of their lack of support and their acting to son-in-law. I kept the end from the first part in which no one is dead, but in this Black Follower says that she will find new people for her plans. Had that happened, we would not find out in this story because it was left as a mystery.

 However, how this disscusion was written earlier (I'm adding if something has to be added ;) ), I can tell you that I wrote the second part, but this is currently one of the three most recent stories, so there is still time to it. We did not even start with my (completly) morbid stories, I will have to mentally prepare myself for that.

 Black Follower does not represent a female person but an occult, ie, a gender is not clear in this situation because she is not a person,but she has a female form. Based on the story may conclude that she doesn't represent a higher rank even though she has her own army. I did not mix religion in this story at all so the Black Follower is not a representative of anti-Christianity or something, I see it as a creature created for some other purpose and her mistress is probably the source of the strong energy of evil, much stronger than the Black Follower. So, for lovers of short but intense readings, I hope this story gets a "renovation" that will appeal to someone. This story, however, has remained on the throne of my horror stories all these years, as it was planned from the very beginning.

 In the original, the date of writing was not written, I'm not sure whether it was before or after the story I had to skip (too personal and morbid to begin with).

 Comming next: one of the, surprisingly, more positive stories, which is a little strange compared to time when it was written O_O

See you again soon!